PICTURE BOOK MANUSCRIPT CRITIQUE (Comprehensive Package)
For $199, I will read your story (fiction or nonfiction picture book manuscripts up to 1000 words – please mention the word count when you contact me), and provide feedback that will answer the following questions:
What’s the writer trying to say? Is the message clear or unclear?
Is the opening strong and compelling? Does the story have a hook?
Is there a character arc? Is the main character well-developed? Why or why not?
Does the main character change or learn something new at the end? Does the character solve her/her own problem?
Is the main character a child or childlike?
Does the story have a plot arc? If yes, does it build to a climax?
If there is no plot, is it a concept book?
Does it have a satisfying resolution? Does the ending grow out of the story? Does it evoke an emotional response and make the reader want to read it again?
Is the POV working?
Is the setting clear, consistent, and interesting?
Is the story tightly focused?
Are there superfluous characters who don’t advance the story?
Is the language kid friendly?
If there is dialogue, is it realistic and natural for a child?
Is the story new and unique? Is the idea old or overdone? How might the writer add freshness?
What are the themes? Are the themes clear? Are there ways to highlight the themes better?
Is it really a board book? Picture book? Would this story be better told as a chapter book or as an early reader? Why?
For $199, I will read your story (fiction or nonfiction picture book manuscripts up to 1000 words – please mention the word count when you contact me), and provide feedback that will answer the following questions:
What’s the writer trying to say? Is the message clear or unclear?
Is the opening strong and compelling? Does the story have a hook?
Is there a character arc? Is the main character well-developed? Why or why not?
Does the main character change or learn something new at the end? Does the character solve her/her own problem?
Is the main character a child or childlike?
Does the story have a plot arc? If yes, does it build to a climax?
If there is no plot, is it a concept book?
Does it have a satisfying resolution? Does the ending grow out of the story? Does it evoke an emotional response and make the reader want to read it again?
Is the POV working?
Is the setting clear, consistent, and interesting?
Is the story tightly focused?
Are there superfluous characters who don’t advance the story?
Is the language kid friendly?
If there is dialogue, is it realistic and natural for a child?
Is the story new and unique? Is the idea old or overdone? How might the writer add freshness?
What are the themes? Are the themes clear? Are there ways to highlight the themes better?
Is it really a board book? Picture book? Would this story be better told as a chapter book or as an early reader? Why?
For $199, I will read your story (fiction or nonfiction picture book manuscripts up to 1000 words – please mention the word count when you contact me), and provide feedback that will answer the following questions:
What’s the writer trying to say? Is the message clear or unclear?
Is the opening strong and compelling? Does the story have a hook?
Is there a character arc? Is the main character well-developed? Why or why not?
Does the main character change or learn something new at the end? Does the character solve her/her own problem?
Is the main character a child or childlike?
Does the story have a plot arc? If yes, does it build to a climax?
If there is no plot, is it a concept book?
Does it have a satisfying resolution? Does the ending grow out of the story? Does it evoke an emotional response and make the reader want to read it again?
Is the POV working?
Is the setting clear, consistent, and interesting?
Is the story tightly focused?
Are there superfluous characters who don’t advance the story?
Is the language kid friendly?
If there is dialogue, is it realistic and natural for a child?
Is the story new and unique? Is the idea old or overdone? How might the writer add freshness?
What are the themes? Are the themes clear? Are there ways to highlight the themes better?
Is it really a board book? Picture book? Would this story be better told as a chapter book or as an early reader? Why?
